Writing II Mid-Semester Students’ Writings 2015 C and D Class on Smoke Problems


Hello there!

Previously, you have submitted your essay on movies that you liked best. Most of the writings was written in descriptive fashion, although some of you wrote argumentative essay on the topic you selected.

This time, you are required to write an argumentative essay on the following question:

“What can you argue about the smoke problem that happens in Indonesia this year (2015)?”

Please write your essay thoroughly and support it with relevant details. Arguments without evidence or proof will lower your score for this mid-term essay writing.

Also, you only need to send the writing once! Do not click the submission twice. Your essay will not be automatically displayed on the screen, but it will wait for my approval for your writing to be published.

Good Luck!

Writing Assignments for Classes of WRITING II, Academic Year 2015-2016


This post is designed for students who are taking Writing II course with me. The topic of this post is designed by following the course syllabus for WRITING II.

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“Ways with Words” by Shirley Brice Heath (1983)


A good book to read, but you need a critical Professor in Rhetoric to accompany you reading this is you are not from the United States. I like this book.

Two communities that were obvious in Heath’s ethnography studies: Roadville and Trackton. Both of these communities seem to share similar circumstances, but the core principle living was not similarly portrayed. In these two communities, an interesting aspect that is mainly exposed by Heath is the ways language evolved from the early generation to the next one. Since my reading is until Trackton, I found that the social circumstances influence the process of how children acquire certain language abilities. It means that the process of reaching literacy competent was largely influenced by the society. As Heath states, “The ways of living, eating, sleeping, worshiping, using space, and filling time which surrounded these language learners would have to be accounted for as part of the milieu in which the processes of language learning took place” (3). When I come to reading the first session until the third session of Part I of her book, I found logical connection. The ability to use language properly is dominantly triggered by the society in which a child lives, especially the parents. For instance, we could see from what is happening with the community in Trackton. Their language spoken system tends to be the same, although particular individual may find new interesting influences from town-blacks.

From Heath’s ethnography studies, the variety of domestic problems and the dynamics of financial matters also shape how literary comes to emerge in such society. Then, if the question is, “What is literacy?” in this context, then, the answer is that literacy is the ways in which the possessing of language ability could possibly adjust the improvement of such community to a better state. These poor black people might live in their limited social circumstances, but to certain degrees they share the same principle, which is coping and working to live. As the times pass by, these two communities emerge into new forms, in which they give significant influence each other, as I may suppose.

Children Language Acquisition and Literacy

The detail description of Heath’s ethnography studies has enriched my horizon in terms of knowing that what we see and hear can be used as tools in creating new knowledge empirically. From the beginning of this book to the end, a vivid reader can see that Heath has written more than what she has composed in her book. What I mean by saying this is that she might have been writing complex draft, arranging relevant materials, and composing all events chronologically. At the end, I can see the link between the title of the book Ways with Words: Language, Life, and Work in Communities and Classrooms with all details in the book. I see this through the connection between children language acquisition and their coming to literacy.

I can see the connection between social circumstances and literacy toward children language acquisition in these statements about children of the two communities. “Children in Roadville grow up surrounded by print: their room decorations, homemade alphabet quilts, books, toys, and church experiences give them an abundance of reading materials”; meanwhile, “Trackton children have no books, and they find their reading in tasks which evolve for them in the house, the plaza, and at the neighborhood store” (Heath 233). We already know that literacy cannot be built in a vacuüm. It is wide open. It is triggered by external factors of an individual. When children come to this world, they will learn to grasp everything around them, especially from parents. However, as children develop their own thinking after looking at different things in their life, they begin to ask questions. The answers of their questions can only be answered through the state of inquiry they have. This is a form of literacy in critical thinking.

To my mind, Heath has described all series of the complexity of needs in life that can influence how someone can come into literacy. Many types of society in the world face the same process as well. The needs to survive and to achieve many things in life have made us creative in fulfilling those needs. We speak, we exist. We write, we alive.

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The above writings were written for my Literacy class at SIUe. I took the class in Fall 2012.

Information about the book:

Heath, Shirley Brice. Ways With Words: Language, Life, and Work in Communities and Classrooms. Cambridge: Cambridge University Press, 1983. Print.

“Humanizing” Our Writing


“Easy reading is damn hard writing” Nathaniel Hawthorne
“Difficult reading is always a form of the writer’s ego to show off his credibility, which is not needed by the readers” – Syayid Sandi Sukandi

This post has been discussed in one of my classes in Southern Illinois University Edwardsville. It turns out that I even fall in love with writing. “The more I read, the more easier how to understand my writing is. The more I discuss with open-minded people, the more I can feel what the magnificent use of writing is” – Syayid Sandi Sukandi, A Fulbright Scholar of English

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To those of you who love to write, putting your ideas into writing would seem to be easy to do, especially when you have gained a lot of experiences in writing and jotting down your ideas into a meaningful piece of text. However, sometimes, before writing something, please ask yourself these questions, “Why should I write? What is it for?”

The questions of “Where are my readers? Who are they?” are connected with “Why should I write? What is it for?” These four questions are actually connected with the essence of the purpose of why we write. This is where the process of humanizing writing starts. From a novice writer into an advanced one, readers are always involved in certain ways. Peter Elbow, a distinguish Professor of English in the United States has stated that someone may write well, even without a teacher. It does not mean that the person does not need a teacher. What it actually means is that the teacher is only a facilitator. The one who should write more is the person him or herself. Understanding grammar well is not enough if someone wants to write well for the readers, except for him or herself per se. If you could answer the two questions above, you will have a sense of to whom your writing will be intended. In other words, your writing will have a purpose. Eventually, your writing will likely be successful.

Therefore, writing something complicated by using an easier written expression, help the readers understand our writing well. Briefly, specific words are for specific readers. As Georges Gusdorf mentions in his book, Speaking (La Parole), translated by Paul T. Brockelman in 1965, p.44, “…language cannot justify anything and everything. It is up to each person to assure the responsibility for his own language by searching for the ‘right word’”. Words will work better if the words can work well in the mind of the readers. If the readers do not have the same meaning as what the writer perceive about the word, the use of the word will create chaos in the mind of the readers. Eventually, what happens is, your writing becomes useless and meaningless. You don’t want that happens, do you? Or, after you wrote something, and suddenly said, “That’s it! I am done!” Is that all? In fact, writing is more than that.

What about writing for public? Writing for a larger audience? If you are a native speaker of English, what about writing for second language speakers of English? The specific “form” of language is used for specific “purposes”; even English has its specific form that is known as English for Specific Purposes. Namely, there are several words that can only be used within the context of business. For instance, “The bank has set its interest rates”. The word “interest” here is not the same as it is found in, “She interests me”. Consequently, we need to adhere that the words we use in expressing our ideas should be properly chosen for the readers. If you speak or write something interesting in your mind, but your listeners or readers do not understand what you are saying, the communication turns into a deathly hollow. Yudhijit Bhattacharjee mentioned in his writing Why Billinguals are Smarter in New York Times, “Nobody ever doubt the power of language. But who would have imagined that the words we hear and the sentences we speak might be leaving such a deep imprint?” Then, the question is, “Will a writer’s work be read if the writer writes with words that people rarely use?”

To make it brief, it can be stated in this simple phrase, “Think deeply; write simply”. Whatever we write in our writings, always consider the readers. Making our thoughts easier is a lot more useful than making it complicated for people. In this digital world, writing has become a life-style. Readers are the people whom our writings will take us to the next level. Humanizing writing sounds a pretty good thing to do by everyone, if they are in need of being understood well in this enchanting world.

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“A student without having an ability to show his or her credibility in an appropriate occasions will look like never learning anything” – Syayid Sandi Sukandi 

Characteristic of professional educator


Characteristic of professional educator

Ihsan Ade Mista

Nowadays, the need of education is getting higher and higher. People realize that education is very needed so that they try as well as possible to get the best education although they spend more money for it. Then, as the need increases, most educators just care about the money they will get that it eliminates their professionalization and responsibility to educate and teach. So, we need to be careful in choosing professional educators by knowing their characteristics.

First, professional educators must have known what they will teach well. Why is it so important? That’s because they will share their knowledge to others that if they share something wrong they can get sin as well as they will be like virus that corrupt people especially the next generations of a country that in their hand the future of a country stay.

Second, as professional educators, they must be open-minded people. It means professional educators will be willing to accept student”s opinion and  never be sensitive people who can be angry to their students that sometimes have high critical thinking in the class. On the contrary, professional educator should teach and guide them to develop their critical thinking so that they can be successful persons. If the educators are always like this, the class will be conducive and students will enjoy their study.

Besides those characteristics, professional educators should be a true person. They have to start what they are going to teach to themselves before sharing it to others. It means they must be able to teach themselves before they teach, for instance : you must be diligent before you teach someone to be diligent, you have to be honest before you ask someone to be honest, or at least you can ask your student not to do it because you have got something bad when you did it, like wise men say “ experience is the best teacher”.

Overall, to find professional educators is not easy, because they have some characteristics that are difficult to have, such as : mastering the lesson well before teaching, being open-minded person, and being a true person. So, we are as candidate of teacher should struggle in our life and our study in order we can take many lesson and experience so that we can be professional educators.

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My comment for this essay:

  • In terms of ideas, Ihsan has arranged the ideas into good logical order of division. The thesis statement which is written in the last sentence of the introductory paragraph is clear; however, Ihsan could make the essay better by using proper Transition Signal, such as “Therefore” instead of using “So”. The use of “So” is only for informal expression.
  • The language is formal but understandable. Besides, it is supported by good grammar in the sentences. In that way, the form of the sentences is various. It can be seen through the way he uses combination between simple sentence and complex sentence.
  • In fact, the ideas are, to my mind, insightful. Keep writing, Ihsan!